Cover Letters With Hooks Catch Employers

How do you write a perfect cover letter?Now let's take a look at Harcourt Potter's cover
The best one is short and has a hook in it that willletter (you may want to take a look at his
make the employer's eyes pop out.resume here to put this in context).
What will make someone's eyes pop out? 
That depends on whose eyes are reading it, whatHarcourt Potter
that person's business problems are, and what283 Swami RoadNorth Treestump, Vermont
you can do to help solve those problems: 05789(802) Job-Magi
- The company is located in Ohio and in theApril 16, 2008
biotech business.  Biotech companies tend to beHortense H. Granger, President
clustered in a handful of areas - Philadelphia/NewFantasy Home Goods
Jersey, Boston, North Carolina and California.  If426 Princeton Pike
your cover letter mentions that you have aLambertville, New Jersey 08111
biotech background and that you would like toDear Ms. Granger:
move back to the Midwest because you grew upAs a VP/Sales & Marketing, I recruited and
in rural Indiana and still have family there, youled a sales force that opened up Wal-Mart,
could solve two of your reader's problems:  she'sMacy's,  L L Bean and Bloomingdale's, as our
had trouble getting biotech people to move to hersales increased from $23-million- to $77-million in
small-town Ohio location, and when she has, mostnine years. 
have moved back to Philadelphia or Chapel Hill,During that time, the Marketing Director I
whenst they came, within a year or two.  Yourecruited conceived and developed our
know her industry and want to be there.  She'saward-winning Twinkle Barrels line that now
interested.represents 44% of company sales that you have
- The company has been trying to break intoprobably seen on our monthly programs on
Wal-Mart for ten years.  You opened upQVC  (and if you saw these, you've probably
Wal-Mart, Target and Home Depot for yourseen me, as I regularly appear on our QVC
company, have been selling to all three of thoseprograms).
retailers for 10 years, and told them that in theNow that we have completed our IPO and it
first line of your cover letter.  The VP/Humanappears that our marketing and sales directors
Resources is on the phone to you within minutes.are both seasoned enough to move into my
 position, I'd like to move to a larger company. I'd
Rules of Direct Mail Copy Writingprefer a location that is less remote and offers
Research on direct mail indicates the following:better educational and cultural opportunities for
- The parts of a letter that are read first are themy children as they move into junior high school.
first sentence and the P.S.  
- Bullets in a letter naturally draw the eye toFinancially, I'm earning a base salary of $215,000,
those sections, and if you put bullets in a letter,plus variable compensation in the range of 35% to
the bulleted sections will be read first, even65%, including options.
before the first sentence and the P.S.I'll be in New York City and New Jersey several
Whether it's being delivered by email or snail mail,times during the next four weeks, and would like
and whether you're sending one or a thousand,to stop by to meet you then. 
your cover letter is a piece of direct mail. Can we meet?
Bearing this in mind, your letter should have aBest wishes,
strong opening sentence and an engaging P.S. 
I'll leave it up to you as to whether you want toHarcourt Potter
use bullets or not.  Bullets will attract the reader'sP.S.  I went to college at Princeton, and would
attention, but they will also make your resumelove to return to the Princeton area.
look more like advertising (and as we all know,This letter was aimed at a major housewares
advertising is less believable).  I think you can gomanufacturer located 20 miles from Princeton,
either way regarding bullets and have an effectiveNew Jersey.  Harcourt has caught Ms. Granger's
cover letter.attention in several key areas.  He knows her
The Hook: Your cover letter needs to have acustomers and the industry well.  It also appears
hook in it that grabs the reader's attention withinthat he knows how to recruit and develop a
five to ten seconds.  That's all the time you haveteam, rather than do everything himself.  She
to get the employer to read further, whichhasn't seen him on QVC, but is aware of the
means you have at best a couple of sentencesTwinkle Barrels line, and feels that her company
to accomplish this. If you're not using bullets, thencould be doing big dollars on the home shopping
your hook needs to be in the first sentence. Ifnetworks.  In addition, this just might be the right
you use bulleted sections, your hook should followperson to start up the infomercial program that
your first bullet. marketing consultants have told her could easily
Here is where you need to immediately,increase their sales by $200-million when you
instantaneously open their eyes, grab theirinclude the boost their sales in the major chains
attention and get them thinking about how youwould get from the increased publicity. Harcourt
can solve their problems. In the cover letteralso has ties to and a reason for moving to her
sample below, you'll see how Harcourt Pottercompany's area.
came up with a hook that was irresistible to hisIf Harcourt was also interested in moving back to
reader.  For more on how to develop the hook,Upstate New York where he grew up, he could
get a copy of How to Get Your Point Across inmention where he grew up in letters to
30 Seconds or Less, by Milo Frank.companies in Upstate New York. In letters to
Cover letters need to be customized.  Forget theOhio companies, he could mention how much he
general, one-size-fits-all, cover letter.  The coverenjoyed Ohio during the four years he worked in
letter needs to be targeted towards thethat state, and how he still spends two weeks
employer's industry and sub-industry,  geographyevery summer there, visiting friends.
and numerous other differentials that are specificIn letters sent to food manufacturers, he can
to the company.  That doesn't mean that if youopen someone's eyes by mentioning the Kroger
send out a thousand letters that each letter mustpromotion that was featured in Supermarket
be unique.  However, by using the miracle ofNews, and his experience selling to Albertsons,
word processing, you can easily develop a dozenWegmans and Ralph's. In letters to clothing
or two dozen form letters, each a little differentimporters, he can lead by mentioning Dillard's,
from the other, producing each time a letter thatMacy's and Bloomingdale's.
makes it look like you targeted it just for theThink customization and hook, hook and hook
company that will be on the receiving end.again when creating cover letters.