When Great Copywriting Can Actually Kill Your Sales

One of the most-quoted copywriting phrases into most people.
the world is, "sometimes people will buy yourEspecially the people we were targeting.
products because of just one bullet."To see what I'm talking about, here are a few of
And that's true.the bullets:
People really will read an ad that's 5, 10, 15 pages- Why sellers will (rightfully) not let you look at
or more...but whip out their wallet simply becausetheir supplier list before you make an offer...and
of a bullet point buried somewhere on page 8.the one "almost magic" way to get them to show
However, there is also another side of the bulletsit to you almost 100% of the time!
story where bullet points can actually hurt your- The ONLY thing your business should technically
sales."own"!
Let me give you a "real life" example.- The chilling financial and physical consequences of
A few years back I wrote an ad that was longbuying businesses with union employees! (Hint: my
(one of my copywriter friends even said, "What iscar was smashed up with me in it...after a union
this the Declaration of Independence!"), copynegotiation that went bad.)
intensive and had something like 60 or 70 bullet- How to make sure you don't get stuck paying
points.all the landlord's taxes, maintenance and insurance
I was dang proud of that ad.costs when buying a business on land you don't
And when I finished it, I sat back, laced myown!
fingers behind my head and congratulated myselfNow, these kinds of bullets are fine if written to
on a job well done.people already familiar with buying businesses.
Until that same copywriter friend of mine aboveBut to the "kitchen table" entrepreneurs on our list
gave me his feedback.-- people who know nothing about buying million
"Ummm Ben..." he said.dollar businesses now, but would love to do it --
"Pretty awesome, isn't it?" I boasted.these bullets would either:
"Yeah, this is great except...with this1.) Mean nothing to them
market...nobody's going to care about any of the2.) Confuse them
stuff in your 14 pages of bullets."3.) Make things sound complicated
I was floored.All three of which will destroy the sale.
Here was a guy who gets paid $25,000 to writeAnyway, I hope the message is clear.
a single sales letter -- making his opinion worth itsYes, bullets are awesome. And just one or two
weight in gold -- telling me all those wonderfulbullets really can make the sale for you.
bullets I'd written were worthless.But, at the same time, you have to be constantly
And as much as I hated to admit it...he was right.asking yourself, "Does my reader know what this
You see, this was an ad showing people how tomeans or care?"
buy large, multi-million dollar businesses, withoutIf the answer's "no", scrap the bullet.
needing any money, credit, banks or priorBecause no matter how powerfully written those
experience.bullets are, they will most likely bore, scare of
And while the benefit of this is universallyconfuse the reader -- and kill the sale.
desired...the details of how this is done is foreign